man door hand hook car door

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  1. dqsirable

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    man & girl go out to drive under moonlight. they stop at on at a side of road.

    he turn to his girl and say:

    "baby, i love you very much"

    "what is it honey?"

    "our car is broken down. i think the engine is broken. ill walk and get some more fuel."

    "ok. ill stay here and look after our stereo. there have been news report of steres being stolen."

    "good idea. keep the doors locked no matter what. i love you sweaty"

    so the guy left to get full for the car. after two hours the girl say "where is my baby, he was supposed to be back by now". then the girl here a scratching sound and voice say "LET ME IN"

    the girl doesnt do it and then after a while she goes to sleep. the next morning she wakes up and finds her boyfriend still not there. she gets out to check and man door hand hook car door
     
  2. VaneeeeellFurbs

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    I don't know what I just read... but it made me rethink my life
     
    #2 VaneeeeellFurbs, Nov 11, 2017
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  3. StealTheCake

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    ...Well ok then
     
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  4. Sapphy

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    Try improving it a little more, it will confuse other readers so you should say who is saying this and that for an example, "Hey there, i have to go now." Says, Steven. "Okay." Replied, Casey. But it is good by the way. No offense, but try correcting your grammar and punctuations. Work on the capitalizations too. I'm coming out with a new story soon, you should check out my other stories too. Good luck on your story btw.
     
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  5. dqsirable

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    i actually copied this from a meme, it was meant as a joke lmbo im not actually a terrible writer believe it or not
     
  6. HorseWhisperer

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    Did you intentionally put sweaty not sweetie? Lol
     
  7. Sapphy

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    Well what's the meaning of the joke? It looks like a story, so it doesn't make any sense tbh.
     
  8. dqsirable

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    its meant to be so badly written its funny, clearly you dont understand this form of humour so i dont see why i should have to explain it :/
     
  9. dqsirable

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    yes, as ive said this thread is a meme i copied, so its meant to have bad grammar etc
     
  10. dqsirable

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    ughhgh i wish people understood the joke
     
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  11. HorseWhisperer

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    xD
     
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  12. HorseWhisperer

    HorseWhisperer Well-Known Member

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    Sad times Oli
     
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